The Odds can change
The Number remains the same
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Chapter 11
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TRAITOR'S GATE
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The Odds can change
The Number remains the same
TRAITOR'S GATE
Posted 05 February 2010 - 07:42 PM
Chapter Eleven
Traitor's Gate
The odds can change
The number remains the same
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Get ready.
Its coming.
This weekend
The final Chapter
BOMBSHELL
Posted 11 February 2010 - 08:47 PM
The name of Chapter Twelve is
STORM BEFORE THE CALM
Posted 12 February 2010 - 03:48 PM
Chapter 12
Storm before the Calm
Posted 12 February 2010 - 05:39 PM
Chapter 12
Storm before the Calm
Tolliver slowly shook his head again; with great deliberation he moved his hand over the keyboard; he dipped his finger, so that it kissed the key.
“Such a tiny movement, needing almost no effort; and all the people will die”
Tolliver inclined his head “No more bets Mr. Bond; the game is over”
The final chapter is now in for submisson.
The odds can change
The number remains the same
007
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Posted 01 March 2010 - 05:42 PM
Yes yes yes yes yes. That ing showed um. Im glad Tolliver got a particularly grissly end. Great twist with Felix great chapter. well done mate well done
Loved the Storm before the calm sex reference, nice bit of relief to the tension there.
Posted 02 March 2010 - 08:25 PM
WOW that certainly raised the standard again
apart from Felix sounding like a Gangsta rapper I was taken for the ride and really thought it was a good one.
All way in the book Tolliver was a slimy piece of ***** glad he wasnt the savior after all
I can see Manic and Bee making an apprearnce in the next story???? am I right???
and a new M bril bit of atmosphere i thought there
all in all a great story action all the way with plot twists that Poirot would be proud of.
Posted 03 March 2010 - 08:38 AM
Rightio - here we are, two lovely chapters in one sitting
Pretty creative ending you've given Sharvin there. Could totally see that being filmed, the bleakness of the scene and Bond's pure coldness.
The confrontation between Bond and Tolliver below the Ossuary was very well written and tense. Could definitely hear Craig speaking the words.
Posted 05 March 2010 - 06:14 PM
Splendid; very entertaining. Thanks for that, and all the effort put into it.
Posted 06 March 2010 - 10:27 PM
Congratulations to Paul (aka Volante)... Bombshell just passed 2000 views, and counting.
Coming soon
The Epilogue
...and on that Bombshell
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Posted 12 March 2010 - 10:30 PM
Roll on the weekend, and my first opportunity to reply to Chrisno1's feedback
First and foremost, thanks for taking the time to read and revew, and provide feedback to BOMBSHELL.
Feedback is a gift and should always be recieved as such. Thanks.
Having read Chris's reviews of ALL the Fleming books and ALL the Bond continuation novels. I am pleased to be deemed worthy of a review from the self proclaimed,"world’s biggest critic"
In answer to the question "Where was the in depth psychoanalysis, the tense exciting narrative, the inventive action sequences, where was the love of local colour, the attention to detail?" Answer, Don't know; there was no attempt to write any differently from TO KILL AND DIE FOR.
I am encouraged by your statement that you generally consider my writing a cut above the ordinary.
And the review started off so well; in accordance with the other feedback recieved. The mystery surrounding M’s removal from office, the death of Mathis in Tahiti and the hoodwinking of Jenifer Foxwell.
Followed by a brilliant scene onboard the nuclear sub when Bond interrupts Jenifer's nervous little piece of espionage followed by the explosive gun battle on the quay side. Your words "fantastic"
I was pleased you enjoyed the development of a brilliant contemporary premise.
And in answer to the question "where do you get these ideas from? I’m rather jealous of that!" the answer is once again "Don't know; thay just evolve.
I too am proud of the story lineabout Trident jamming the co-ordinates "a touch of genius" I'll take that as a thumbs up!!!
I was also pleased you (like many others) enjoyed the invention of my Q character. As explained before, I use Nigel Havers as my insperation; and so understanding his acting mannerisums find it easy to adjust the dialogue.
But then came the bombshell (foregive the pun)
I'm suprised you couldn’t make head or tail of the plot.
I felt the villians were well seperated. Skedar, as head of the Hildebrand Institute showed his hand on the first meeting with Bond.
Sharvin, had been identified as KGB
Mila, after the initial meeting was soon validated by Felix Leiter as an ally.
Working for Skedar; are the menacing couple Manic and Bee.
Sharapov, was introduced with Medyev, so it was clear he was the Russian version of 007. The fact that you longed for Stasi; encourages me to develop the Manic character through the next story A SECRET TO THE GRAVE!
I'm at a loss to understand how characters popping up through the story "with no warning" cause you a problem. I feel it's part of the twists and turns of the plot. It is a spy story after all, and should not be predictible.
Also you'll need to be more precise about your understanding of "the torture scene"
I wasn't aware I'd included one.
Also, I need more clarity about your statement "cutting away from the denouement of a scene" I don't know what that means. However if it is "exactly how an editor would" I take that as a complement
The fact that you felt BOMBSHEL reads like a screenplay, with edits, production notes, directions, sound and visual effects included.
"By the climax I was convinced it was a movie in the making" Well once again THANK YOU. If you have any influence, please have a chat to Mr Purvis and Mr Wade
I personally was very proud of the scenes in the Bone Ossuary; and am pleased you found them "sensationally alarming". To have it compared to a "Tarantino-esque delight in the repetitive stand-offs between different sets of characters" Is high praise indeed
In reply to you believing you were spoiling everyone else's congratulations. Well I don't believe it soured anyone else's enjoyment one iota.
One thing I will do is to continue to think out plot's to "Take over the World" I will event characters to enable a suspension of belief; and I will continue to think up a number of scenarios for James Bond to act out. One thing I'm convinced of is that A SECRET TO THE GRAVE will be better than ANYTHING I've done before.
There is an old Chinese proverb that goes "If I have the earth to sleep on; my arm for a pillow; and the stars to watch; I shall be a King amongst men. But should there be one house where I am not welcome; I shall be a prisoner"
Roughly translated it means; votes for BOMBSHELL 2400 against 1.
...and we all know that The odds can change, but the number remains the same.
...and lets face it THAT is a great TAG line
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votes for BOMBSHELL 2400 against 1.
...and we all know that The odds can change, but the number remains the same.
...and lets face it THAT is a great TAG line