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[volante]

BOND IS BACK

[terminus]

The opening of your latest piece, I have to admit, reminds me a third season episode of Spooks - wherein Danny and Zoe had to go onboard a ferry and assasinate a man attempting to sell biological weapons - but this, in fact, isn't a bad thing as you've managed to enthuse this with the same time-jumping that the Casino Royale PTS had an inject a sense of real peril for the characters which, sadly, that particular episode of Spooks lacked. And then you take it in a direction we weren't expecting - for an opening to your fiction, this is certainly a good piece of work. Am adding this along side Those Who The Gods ... on my To Read As Published list.

[volante]

The opening of your latest piece, I have to admit, reminds me a third season episode of Spooks - wherein Danny and Zoe had to go onboard a ferry and assasinate a man attempting to sell biological weapons - but this, in fact, isn't a bad thing as you've managed to enthuse this with the same time-jumping that the Casino Royale PTS had; and inject a sense of real peril for the characters which, sadly, that particular episode of Spooks lacked. And then you take it in a direction we weren't expecting - for an opening to your fiction, this is certainly a good piece of work. Am adding this along side Those Who The Gods ... on my To Read As Published list.

Thanks Terminus;
Now, first of all what are you doing up at 02.25am????
I'd already set the "Goodnight" needs rescuing thought; in Bombshell; so I wanted to plunge straight into the action.
Starting with a small light on a door, I wanted to inject some chaos into the Prologue. The idea was to hide the fact they were on board a ship; and concentrate on the action; which as you point out changes direction; putting Bond into a situation that he (and the reader) is unprepared for.

How do you think Goodnight measured up. Is she a Montserrat Lombard or a Sally Breton in your mind????

I'm waiting for our own Goodnight to comment!

There will be twists and turns and suprises galore; as the story unfolds.

CHAPTER ONE will be online TUESDAY 14/09/10 evening.

A new M
A new Mission
A new Bond girl
All introduced in Chapter ONE - "OPERATION DOMINO"

[terminus]

Montserrat Lombard. Definitely a Montserrat Lombard.

Heh - am a bit of a night bird

[volante]

Montserrat Lombard. Definitely a Montserrat Lombard.

Heh - am a bit of a night bird

Well you might be in for a long night.

Chapter One

Operation Domino
- Is now in for moderation. 20 pages of action in the Gulf of Aden; Vauxhall Cross, and a flight to Yemen.

Oh yeah, and yo're right; I can see and hear her deliver the lines

[Goodnight]

BOND IS BACK

Another top notch poster!!

I know I haven't said this here, but Volante, I am very flattered that you would use my cbn name for your story.


I can't even remember who I picked for Goodnight, I think I chose Sally Breton didn't I?

She reminds me a bit of Patsy Kensit from casulty and the infamous Bo'selecta.LOL

She reminds me a little of Britt Ekland here.
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[volante]

BOND IS BACK

Another top notch poster!!

I know I haven't said this here, but Volante, I am very flattered that you would use my cbn name for your story.


I can't even remember who I picked for Goodnight, I think I chose Sally Breton didn't I?

She reminds me a bit of Patsy Kensit from casulty and the infamous Bo'selecta.LOL

She reminds me a little of Britt Ekland here.
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Thanks Scarlett; but the question is do you like the Goodnight character?
The Patsy Kensit voice goes very well with the character; breathless, almost husky.

Well; here it is, the lunch of A SECRET TO THE GRAVE has been rather quiet, I think.

Chapter TWO is now in for submission.

As the story unfolds the plot takes a number of twists; but lets not get ahead of ourselves; sit back an enjoy

[volante]

The opening of your latest piece, I have to admit, reminds me a third season episode of Spooks - wherein Danny and Zoe had to go onboard a ferry and assasinate a man attempting to sell biological weapons - but this, in fact, isn't a bad thing as you've managed to enthuse this with the same time-jumping that the Casino Royale PTS had an inject a sense of real peril for the characters which, sadly, that particular episode of Spooks lacked. And then you take it in a direction we weren't expecting - for an opening to your fiction, this is certainly a good piece of work.

Well all I can say is thank goodness A SECRET TO THE GRAVE launched before SPOOKS series 9.
Last night I watched in fasination; as Lucas North battled Somali pirates with his new girl, Beth.

[terminus]

I know! Was just about to post that! Lol - good indeed. Great minds think alike, eh! I've been a bit lax and have to say that I have two installments to read - hopefully not as daunting as the prologue.

[Automan]

WOW what else can I say. Just blown away man.
I read up to chapter two in one hit (dont tell my boss)
I been looking forward to this story for ages; really good stuff fast relentless pace.
This guy Ben Kelly makes me laugh, but you might have to update us on Don Johnson??

[volante]

WOW what else can I say. Just blown away man.
I read up to chapter two in one hit (dont tell my boss)
I been looking forward to this story for ages; really good stuff fast relentless pace.
This guy Ben Kelly makes me laugh, but you might have to update us on Don Johnson??

LOL thanks Ben.

Chapter three now on line.

"The Deep Blue Sea"
Where Bond meets an old friend

[volante]

Chapter FOUR
GHAWAR FIELD

On line tonight.

As the negotiations for the release of the tanker take a suprising turn;
James Bond takes Beth for a drive along the coast.

[volante]

OK. Maybe there was a problem last night.

I have re submitted; hopefully Chapter Four will be available tonight.

[volante]

Okay; so Bond and Beth have made up, their relationship goes from strength to strength.
The drive to the plant should have been calm and relaxing; fortunately Felix and Jimmy Carter showed their usefullness.
But it seems that Wazir is always one step ahead, and Bond has ended up back in the hands of Mr. Manic.

Chapter 5
BALHAF

Goes online tomorrow.

More twists and turns guarenteeded

[volante]

Chapter 5
...in for submission; get ready this will ltieraly take your breath away.

If you haven't begun to read A SECRET TO THE GRAVE
now is your chance to get right into the story...

MI6 agent James Bond is on the trail of Wazir, a wouldbe polititan, with a history of arms dealing.
Bond infultrates the supply-chain but is instantly marked for execution.

But 007 is not alone on this mission. 'Bond-girl' Beth is also in Yemen to supervise the recruitment of imigrent workers to the new Liquid Gas Terminal.
Oh yeah - the same Terminal that a Hijacked Korean tanker is heading for.

"So" you might ask; what's so importnat about Beth?
Well she now holds the secret to Wazir's plan; but she is sworn to secrecry!!!

[Bryce (003)]

Very nice good sir. Went down well. Nice flavor to it all. Carry on my friend.

[volante]

Very nice good sir. Went down well. Nice flavor to it all. Carry on my friend.

Glad you're enjoying it 003. Its grear to know I have your support.
Stay with the story, coz its about to take another turn.

Looks like an admin glitch with Chapter 5; I submitted it Tusday as per schedule.
Have patience my friends; Chapter 5 will come to those who wait!

...and its a cracker

[Automan]

Where's Chapter 5 ?

Gonna have to watch Corrie now

[Automan]

Well that was worth the wait.
Great start to the weekend Bond for brekfast
Manic proves his worth as a Bond villian yet again

your story pace has a terrific sense of action
Chelan character is full of menace i love him.

[volante]

Well that was worth the wait.
Great start to the weekend Bond for brekfast
Manic proves his worth as a Bond villian yet again

your story pace has a terrific sense of action
Chelan character is full of menace i love him.

Cheers for that.

Chapter 5 on line for your enjoyment

[volante]

For those keeping score between "Spooks" and "A Secret to the Grave"
I have to admit defeat in yonight's episode.

My sniper shot doesn't appear till Chapter 10

remember you heard it here first.

[volante]

Chapter 7

In for submission.

Manic has the upper hand. He makes 007 an offer he can't refuse

[volante]

Chapter 7

In for submission.

Manic has the upper hand. He makes 007 an offer he can't refuse

Honest guys; Chapter 7 was posted Tuesday night.

[Harry Potter]

Hey hey its online now and I was the first to read it.
Bravo 2 zero my friend; bravo
you keep taking us on new and exciting curves to a great story.

Looking out for next week already

[volante]

Hey hey its online now and I was the first to read it.
Bravo 2 zero my friend; bravo
you keep taking us on new and exciting curves to a great story.

Looking out for next week already

Thanks Mr. Potter.
Glad you're enjoying the latest tale

Chapter 8 is now on line.

007 has a harrowing experience at the very gates of hell!

[Automan]

A really good almost complete BOND shows his true colours in chapter 8
I'm enjoying this story; but this last chapter was truely amazing

I'm off for a kebab now; enjoy your holiday Mr. Volante

[volante]

A really good almost complete BOND shows his true colours in chapter 8
I'm enjoying this story; but this last chapter was truely amazing

I'm off for a kebab now; enjoy your holiday Mr. Volante

Ha Ha off for a kebab - I like it.
Even if I say so myself; I enjoyed that chapter.

My holiday was brilliant; and I'm back now for a week of work (including Saturday)

Just to let you know
CHAPTER NINE
THEIR EYES ARE GREEN
has been submitted

Please feel free to critique the Chapter; and the story so far!

[volante]

Just a quick note to advise
Chapter Nine has finally hit the web page.

Enjoy

[volante]

Just a quick update; to say the next Chapter will go in for submission December the 1st

till then

Bon Voyage

Volante

[volante]

Just a quick review of Chapter NINE
THEIR EYES ARE GREEN

CIA agent, Felix Leiter; has cornered his long time adversary, Lecoyte Chelan; and is escorting him back to Aswan.
But the wiley old criminal; is still able to goad Leiter, into losing his temper...

Leiter cut him off “…This isn’t about me. It’s about retribution for all the blood you have on your hands”
Chelan looked at his hands; then showed them to Leiter; palm up

“No blood here; none that you would be able to see”

Leiter kept his feelings under control “There are a lot of bodies out there; and I know where they’re buried”

“You seem overly concerned about all the people that have died. What’s the matter Felix, can’t afford the flowers?”
Both Leiter’s and Chelan’s mobile pinged; the signal was coming through again

Leiter motioned to Chelan phone “Check your accounts; it’s your money that’s frozen”
Chelan took the mobile from his pocket “May I?” Leiter nodded in agreement.
Chelan pressed one of the keys on his phone. Suddenly the Mercedes juddered to a halt.
The doors locked; and a hiss of gas filled the interior.
As Leiter went for his gun; Chelan produced a small mask; once in place it just covered his mouth and nose; the gas seeped into the car; Leiter fell forward.
Chelan took the gun from his out flung hand; and shot the CIA Driver.
Chelan punched another button on his mobile and the door locks released.
He unbuckled his safety belt and stepped out of the car.

Chelan removed the mask “That went well”

Pulling Leiter’s inert body from the car Mr. Manic replied “Like a dream”

Leiter struggled on the ground
“Better kill me now Chelan; cause there isn’t nowhere you’ll be able to hide now”
“Oh I’m not going to kill you” he drew out the words like he was singing them

Felix pressed his hands down onto the road, and tried to get up
“Then we’ll come after you” he said in a whisper.
“But Felix, don’t you realize there is no ‘we’ only you”

“That don’t change a thing I’ll come for you”

“I’d be disappointed if you didn’t”


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