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#31 Harry Fawkes

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Posted 03 January 2008 - 08:08 PM

The name's Fawkes. Harry Fawkes :D To my gentle readers another announcement: Today I have posted two, yes two more chapters. I am sure you will like them because a lot of questions are answered. The plot, believe me you, has become razor sharp with these new chapters. Here's a little teaser to quench your thirst:

[spoiler][color="#FF0000"]...Leiter nodded.

#32 Qwerty

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Posted 03 January 2008 - 10:59 PM

Two new additions up now.

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Posted 05 January 2008 - 03:29 PM

As all literary Bond lovers know fine well, Ian Fleming was the type of writer who always strived to get the nicks and knacks of what he was writing about right. Granted, as a writer of fiction he did sometimes make use of what is referred to as 'artistic licence' but very rarely. Now due to the fact that I am writing a novel (following in his footsteps I mean) in which his beautiful creation is the star, I have tried to do the same (stop laughing cause I'll send Amon Locke out for you :D ) and get the nicks and Knacks right (don't mention the smoking MkB. That's a different matter altogether young man).

However, some Bond fans have become so used to the James Bond gadgets that a JB film or JB novel without them is seen as a sacrilege. I myself prefer Bond battling it out alone, without the help of mind boggling contraptions . Most of the time you see I'm a Dalton type of guy, if you get my drift, so I don't like my gadgets taking over the limelight of my hero.

Anyway, to the point cause I'm drifting away here :P . I received two e-mails from two CBn guests who stumbled across my work of art in the FF page and have dared to complain that my Bond was too, quote, '...Down to earth because he doesn't use any gadgets.'.

My first response to that was: 'Helloooo, I've tried writing something different than what's out there at the moment thank you very much or haven't you bleedin' noticed yet?' But then I realized that they were right. It was true. Harry Fawkes' James Bond was, albeit being one hell of a lucky bastard, quite down to earth as far as gadgets were concerned.

So, like a good, kind hearted writer that I am, I went through the story again inside my mind :D :

Bond is on holiday and is captured by one heck of a sadistic creep . Bond is tortured but escapes thanks to the timely intervention of a once in a hundred years storm and ends up half drowned in hospital from where he is abducted again by two sadistic and creepy creeps. Bond is then, once again, tortured violently but escapes this time thanks to the timely intervention of a very sexy lady. Bond is then recaptured (poor sod) and again tortured by the first sadistic creep. Bond escapes again thanks to the timely intervention of his rage and after killing first sadistic creep gets help from a dear American friend. Dear friend is captured and the lucky bastard ends up the prisoner of a sadistic and very very sexy lesbian killer (Poor Bond lucky Leiter ) while Bond is left with egg on his face trying to put things right with the aid of a sexy French bomb shell. STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS

About twenty spectacular, razor sharp, thoroughly exciting and unpredictable chapters in one hell of a James Bond novel that indeed (I know I'm being quite modest here B) ) stands up with the best of them, and no gadgets.
None whatsoever.
Not even a teeny, weeny, meeny little one.

Well, OK, I thought. I'll just simply insert the gadgets. After all, I've got all the other ingredients right (the action, the image of Bond, the gratuitous sex and violence, the briefing with M, the deranged plot which keeps you on the edge of your seat and last but not least the sado-masochistic villain); so now is all it would take is adding one simple chapter where James Bond uses a gadget.

So, I sat down at my desk in my inner sanctum, John Barry's Bond Back in Action playing again and again and again through the loudspeakers above me, a glass of bubbly (Moet et Chandon and no less thank you very much) on my left, a lit cigarette (Benson & Hedges) on my right and came up with Chapter 7 'THE FAST LANE' which was posted before writing and posting this diatribe.

Now then, gentle readers, listen and listen carefully:
I now challenge anyone of NOBODY CHEATS DEATH's readers out there to disprove the existence of the gadgets my Bond uses in Chapter 7 (And believe me when I tell you I did not come up with the title NCD cause it just sounded good. There is a reason why which will of course become evident in the final chapter :D ) or prove that I didn't get the nuts and bolts correct.

You may chose not to reply. I do not care one bit believe me but If you do reply and prove impossible what Bond does in Chapter 7 then I will personally send you a signed copy of Ian Fleming's Casino Royal.

So for now just wait for QWERTY's 'New addition up now' post and start reading and I'll make you a Harry Fawkes fan before you even know what hit ya...

Until then,

best regards

Roger Mulvaney MRQ AKA Harry Fawkes :tup:

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Posted 05 January 2008 - 11:49 PM

Four new additions up now.

#35 Harry Fawkes

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Posted 06 January 2008 - 09:55 PM

As those interested can see from today's chapters I have quickened the pace. NOBODY CHEATS DEATH is becoming more exciting than ever at every turn of the page :D .

I am also happy to inform you all that I have just posted another two chapters (Did you think I would leave you THIRSTING to know what happens next? :D Never.). Hence I've been at it all day and most of last night to get them ready. It won't be long now till you get to the very last page and all will be over - Or has it just begun? Who knows :P .

Anyway, I have included a taste of what's to come tomorrow and if you have the guts, go ahead and peel the covers away and take a peep of what's next Bond fan. YOU WILL BE HOOKED I GUARANTEE IT:

[spoiler][color="#FF0000"]...Pawli went back inside the Exec. He opened the Beaufort casing revealing a large silver face with a digital control panel. He produced a small key and inserted it into a slot. He stayed there for a moment that seemed to last forever. It was as if he had frozen. Sweat appeared on his forehead and he took a deep breath.

#36 Qwerty

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Posted 06 January 2008 - 11:20 PM

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Posted 07 January 2008 - 12:32 AM

I just finished reading the first 6 chapters and am having a great read - thanks Harry! I like the introduction of new characters along with interaction of a friend from the past.

Other than the usual need for an editor's eyes, the writing is very good. The story flows nicely and I like the style very much. I just dumped the remaining chapters to my Treo to keep me company on my trip this week.

Keep up the good work! :D

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Posted 07 January 2008 - 01:09 AM

Well, I've just read the fresh new chapters, and I'm on the edge on my seat... And now, how am I supposed to go to sleep, mmmh?!? :D

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Posted 09 January 2008 - 08:48 PM

Hiya guys.

I'm back and I've been at it at full swing!

I can now safely announce that tonight at precisely midnight I am going to post the mods of this wonderful site the first of the last two chapters of my baby Nobody Cheats Death: 'AFTERMATH'.

The absolute and final chapter, 'THE DEATH OF A DOUBLE 'O''. will be posted tomorrow night at the same time.

You will enjoy them I give you my word of words.

It has been harder than I expected. I've been going around in all kinds of directions since my last post. You see, the question I was faced with at the end of the last chapter I posted was: How on earth was James Bond going to get out of this one?

I had written myself into a corner without even knowing it and when that happens you have to think hard. Well, that is precisely what I did. I thought and thought and thought. And then, dear readers, it hit me like a bolt from the blue:

The perfect ending. And that's exactly where I've been. Writing the perfect ending. What's it all about you might be asking? Simple: Cold and merciless death...

Roger

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Posted 10 January 2008 - 12:13 AM

And so, as promised earlier, the chapter has been sent. I will not be leaving any teasers this time for obvious reasons but what I can tell you now without giving anything away is that you may expect to see Bond as you have never seen him before! And that's a fact.


Goodnight and read on

Harry Fawkes MRQ

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Posted 10 January 2008 - 02:53 AM

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Posted 10 January 2008 - 09:24 PM

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#43 Harry Fawkes

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Posted 10 January 2008 - 09:27 PM

Well, all is well that ends well :tup: . The last chapter has been posted :( . I know I said I'd post it at twelve but to tell you the truth I finished it before schedule :) . What an ending :) ! I've even surprised myself B) ! I think its good and I hope you all do too :) . My first James Bond fan fiction novel. Wow. Fantastic challenge and I loved every minute of it. I was living and breathing James Bond since I started writing and it felt good. I know I know, I am not Gardner, I am not Benson and I am certainly not Fleming but I tell you I loved pretending I was :D .

What next? I don't know. Maybe try my hand at Simon Templar? That's a cool idea. Write a Saint fan fiction novel, who knows :tup:

I would like to thank CBn again for opening pages like this one. It really gives the fans something cool to do and there are some great writers out there. I would also like to thank the CBn members called MkB, Bryce and Double-O-seven for giving me courage when I needed it and showing me where I went wrong.

I will polish the novel first chance available.


Well anyway, I am now going to log out. Will Ian Fleming's James Bond ever be back in a Harry Fawkes adventure after this?

You'll have to read the last chapter 'The Death of a Double 'O' Agent to find out :D


HARRY FAWKES

NOBODY CHEATS DEATH



Best regards


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#44 Harry Fawkes

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Posted 11 January 2008 - 09:24 PM

IAN FLEMING'S JAMES BOND 007 WILL BE BACK

IN



HARRY FAWKES



TROUBLESHOOTER





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Posted 15 January 2008 - 05:10 PM

STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS (I really don't know why I do that :tup: )

Uhm, anyway :tup: Where was I. Ah, yes. STOP PRESS.

I would just like to announce that something hot is coming your way!

Something all true Bond fans will appreciate and cherish as an indispensable part of their Bond collection.

It is an ultimate.

It is something that will simply blow you away.

Believe me when I tell you that you won't know what hit you!

Think I'm bluffing? Watch this space!


STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS STOP PRESS (Sorry about that :( )

Spoiler
:)

HARRY FAWKES MRQ

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Posted 16 January 2008 - 01:30 AM

Harry,
Just finished reading NCD, that is quite an ending you put together!

I'm looking to Troubleshooter, will it follow the lead-in that you provide at the end of NCD?

Keep up the good work, I need these excellent fan fictions to carry me between official novels. Fleming is good, but I can only read Casino Royale once every year or two!

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Posted 19 January 2008 - 06:21 PM

Thanks a million Double-O-seven :) . I am very glad you enjoyed NOBODY CHEATS DEATH :tup: . Fabulous :( . Well, as for your question, yes TROUBLESHOOTER will in fact follow the lead-in at the end of NCD :tup: . Having said that, however, I must point out that before TROUBLESHOOTER graces this fine web site I am going to hit you all with a quick surprise blast from the past. You'll know what I mean soon. Till then, thanks a million for your lovely comments :D .


Harry Fawkes MRQ

#48 Harry Fawkes

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Posted 19 February 2008 - 07:12 PM

'Something very very bad is coming your way, Mr. Bond. You have flirted with death for far too long. Now she wants you all for herself and nothing, nothing is going to stop her from laying her icy hands on you.'



James Bond looked back, his face pale, eyes dark. He smiled somewhat sadly. 'Well tell the bitch I've been waiting for her for quite some time now,' he said softly and disappeared round the corner.



T R OO7 U B L E S H OO7 T E R



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Posted 06 March 2008 - 04:54 PM

[spoiler] ...[color="#FFFFFF"]It was approximately an hour and a half later when James Bond

Edited by Harry Fawkes, 06 March 2008 - 05:00 PM.


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Posted 10 March 2008 - 07:41 PM

H A R R Y F A W K E S


T R O O 7 U B L E S H O O 7 T E R




[color="#0000FF"]
[size=5]A Daring Kidnap

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Posted 31 March 2008 - 07:13 PM

FOR YOUR EYES ONLY, BOND LOVER...WITH A KILL!

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Posted 14 April 2008 - 06:12 PM

Hi all. Hope everyone is ok. Missed you guys loads. Been popping in and out now and then; but only for a couple of minutes just to brows through and catch up with the news. Life is on hold at the moment and will continue to be on hold for the next two or three months. Going through quite a lot lately and the worst is still yet to come! Will be in the UK in a few days time back to the Brit Army for a while. Left right left right and all that [censored]e! Ah well, can't win them all. Will be up north and missing sunny Malta. Wales should be lovely this time of year (Not with a bloody back pack strapped across your back and a rifle in both hands I think). Lots and lots of things to prepair and no time to do it! Mind you, if all goes well I should come out of it a better man. Any way, till I pop in again (or should that read SHOOT IN AGAIN in Bond lingo) may your God bless you and keep you safe and sound till the sun rises in the deep blue sky.

Roger Mulvaney :tup:

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Posted 27 April 2008 - 12:53 PM

IN A TIME OF DANGER AND UNCERTAINTY...

WHEN ALL ODDS FAVOR THE ABSOLUTE PERSONIFICATION OF ALL EVILS...

AND WHEN WORLD PEACE IS THREATENED BY A NEW CRIMINAL ORGANIZATION MORE DEADLIER THAN SPECTRE...

ONE MAN HAS FOUND HIMSELF ONCE AGAIN LOOKING STRAIGHT INTO THE EYES OF DEATH FOR QUEEN AND COUNTRY...


JAMES BOND
OO7

IS BACK
IN


HARRY FAWKES
TROUBLESHOOTER



COMING SOO7N



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Posted 20 June 2008 - 09:36 PM

I am finally back - And what a six weeks it has been.
Six weeks without CommanderBond.net.
UGGGGHH! HULK SMASH!
The only form of Bond entertainment I had at disposal during these six weeks was me humming the bloody Bond theme to myself.
Nothing more nothing less.
It was sort of like a prison stretch.
Freedom taken away from me.
Well, that said I am now going to catch up with what's out there in this fine Bond site!

Harry Fawkes MRQ

Ooooh, wait a minute I lied!!!!! I had three days to myself. What is called in the British Army a long week-end. Friday Saturday and Sunday. All my mates left base and spent their three days away from base with their families. For obvious reasons I couldn't do that so you know what I did? I locked myself in my small excuse for a room and read THE DEVIL MAY CARE. Three days of bliss with Bond.

And I must say it was a great three days and a great read.

'It was good to see you back, 007.'

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Posted 20 June 2008 - 09:43 PM

Hey, Harry! Finally, they released you! :tup:
So now you're an expert at all arms (and bed blocks)? :tup:
Welcome back!

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Posted 20 June 2008 - 09:57 PM

Cheers MkB. Yep, All Arms and bed blocks and beeswaxing the boots and spit and polish - Absolute torture :tup: And now I am free again. Nice to see you are well mon ami. :tup:

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Posted 08 October 2009 - 06:09 PM

[RESURRECTION TIME!

Hi, Harry! As promised, I've started to read your back catalogue!

I know you are one of the prolific writers on CmdrBndFanFic, and I am certainly not going knock your popularity; judging from the number of replies you get on the site, you are clearly delivering the goods as per the FanFic requirements!

So, I just finished Nobody Cheats Death and I have a few posers. Please don't atke it personally....

Firstly I understand this was your first full fledged 007 novel. I don’t know if it was your first ever complete effort at writing. Assuming it was, in these respects, I was fairly happy with what I read. Subsequently you’ve shuffled a few more stories onto CBN and I hope to see your style develop. I will try to read them all, Harry!

I don’t want to make this appear like I am dissing your efforts, (and it would be a very retrospective diss, given you wrote NCD in 2007) however, I had some real problems with this novel, particularly regarding its structure and characters.

Taking the structure of the novel; first, I was really surprised by the length of this piece. About a third of the way through Bond has been tortured (twice) to within an inch of his life (or just his skin???) but has managed to kill all the bad guys and is the last man standing. Brilliant! End of story! So why do I have another almost 200 pages.... oh, it’s the actual story now!

That’s a very sarcastic way of saying you’ve not tightened up your plot. The stuff with Locke is almost irrelevant to the rest of NCD, except to introduce the fact that there is a price on 007s head. You could have done this in M’s office.

The second section of the book is a big improvement; it’s by far the best part. You develop the story really well and actually appear to be heading for a worthwhile climax. Bond’s route to Sicily and Malta is wholly probable. (Incidentally, I liked the scene where 007 read a Gardner novel; are you a Gardner fan, because I detected elements of WLOD in the narrative>>>>) I really enjoyed the scenes where Bond was stealing the Virgin Awakening. There was a sense of mystery and suspense here. I was with Bond all the way at this point, and you described the goings on at Glencoe well. It was one of the (too few) times I felt at home reading the piece. So much so, I almost forgave the first third. Until I learnt I had another storyline tagged on the end.

Having reached the Villa Croce on Malta, Bond is still steps behind the villains. The shoot out is well written, but I was aching for a resolution at this point, because 007 had already been through the mill and I guess I wanted his agony to end. Yet, you extend your story for another 80 pages, drop the tension and struggle to build it again. I didn’t buy the nuclear bomb thing at all (and neither would the press!) and your finale [John Gardner-esque?] twist seemed improbable.

However you did create some very atmospheric scenes at the German villa, but you wasted the opportunity for a fantastic sadistic denouement because you had already tortured Bond half to death in the first third of the novel. It felt like you copped out. Had you reversed the chapters, you would have provided a fitting climax, as it stands, well, I thought it was underwhelming.

Which brings me nicely onto your characters: you spend a great deal of time on the many individual personas, but most of them don’t matter and are irrelevant to your plot. For instance, the back story to the yachtsman at the start of the book was unnecessary. So is the meeting between Sabine and Nicole (whatever happened to Nicole?). You have created really strong back stories for the villains, but why don’t we see them in action? Sabine’s downfall isn’t even on the page. Goethe is given a cursory 8 pages at the rear of the novel – and he is your principal baddie. The one dimensional two-some of Locke and Aleshia features for longer.

Additionally the spiral of your narrative means you are constantly introducing new people. This suggests you have not tightened the plot, because often they have not been mentioned earlier. The chief bad architect here is the Hungarian Krasno. If he really knew where Goethe was, why didn’t Bond ask him earlier and get the mission over with? I also struggled with the SAS mercenaries, who sounded like rejects from The Sea Wolves. I kept thinking, why are these people in this story and what are they doing? I realised, when Felix was in hospital, that it was done because you couldn’t have 007 in two places at once and were struggling to refine the narrative.

Having said that, you showed a deft touch of cosy dialogue for the mercenaries; this was frequently missing through most of the novel. There was a particularly twee emotional scene between Bond and Sam where they declare their love for each other, but (sorry) I didn’t buy it. The two lovers sounded like they wanted to resolve a problem rather than finish their lives together! It was an untidy and contrived scene, made worse by allowing the dialogue to stand alone without the character's thoughts or emotions.

Paradoxically, you did well when Sabine met Bond and I got a feel for the underlying tension in their meeting. The difficulty here was that you had already revealed much of Sabine's internal psyche, so the element of surprise was missing. (See below...)

Sabine was the outstanding character of the piece; I was completely taken in by her history, her sex appeal and her rage – hook, line and sinker. Fantastic! Fiona Volpe with bisexuality! A neat twist that stood out and made me nod my head in affirmation!

Unfortunately, I was less impressed with the Sabine –Felix contretemps, chiefly because you over laced it with a peculiar sexual undercurrent which I neither accepted nor enjoyed. I did not understand why Sabine explains the HaJinn plot to Felix. In terms of structure, it is a conversation which Bond should be having. The only reason for the ruse is to extend the story rather than clarifying and refining it. Felix was always a minor character in the Bond world. He hardly does anything worthwhile for 007 (except turning up in a great car every now and then and being mutilated by sharks) and to suggest the one legged, one armed bandit would be an sensual allure for the wonderfully sexy Sabine is a mockery.

Indeed overall your sexual descriptions really grated. I am not a prude, but if I want to read a bad erotic novel, I will. Some of your spread legs and hard lengths made me feel ill. There is a school of thought that says less is more. I don’t believe 007 is the place for OTT innuendo.

On an equal footing, regarding the violence, why does everyone get shot between the eyes? Sometimes more than once a page. That’s tremendously good shooting!

Please, Harry, don’t think this review is all bad, I actually enjoyed a lot of NCD. One of your most successful ideas was to introduce a new M, Colonel Jackson, who I felt had a real edge to him, something of a [email protected]@@@@d one thinks! I liked your idea of turning the double-0s into paid assassins, no better, no worse, and you referred to it several times when probing Bond’s conscious, which was good.

Also the first chapter of the novel (Bond and Toni’s coupling aside) was splendid. It reminded me of Fleming c.LALD and had a brilliant turn of phrase (your undersea world stuff was great, very IF!) which made me look forward to what was to follow. But the sadistic torture scenes that followed almost finished me off, especially once Locke explained he was doing it for fun. I didn’t really care then; where was the motive?

However, you then surprised me, Harry, with your descriptions of Sicily, which really made me feel part of that beautiful island. I didn’t buy the Mafia connection bits and (honestly) I lost track of which Don was which. In fact, I pretty much considered Drago a redundant character. The fact he does very little, despite being on the pages for longer than Goethe, backs up my impression I think.

So, what do I think of NCD overall? Well, I didn’t dislike it. It had some good scenes and often your turn of phrase is exemplary, but I didn’t understand why you had to give me three stories instead of one, which is what I felt I was reading. There is always a case for joining strands of different stories together, but they need to be logically linked, not an excuse for mayhem and blood and thunder, which in honesty, I felt this was. Refining that trait will also help your character development, because instead of 5 nasty villains, you only need to construct 2 or 3 and won’t repeat yourself!

I look forward to Trouble Shooter!

Incidentally, what was the point of the epilogue?

Chris

p.s. I read some of your posts here, and I see why your slightly episodic formula came about....

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Posted 12 October 2009 - 09:18 PM

And like a bad dream I'm back!

Hiya all - forgive me please if you can but, my God, has it been a B)e week and week-end for me!

You'll never believe it but my computer blew up on me!

Yep.

Blew up!

The whole Motherboard or whatever the hell they call it went up in smoke so to speak and so I had to take the little :tdown:e to the 'fixer' who informed me that I needed a new one. PC that is!

Well yours truly didn't have a back up system (dumb :tdown:) so I asked '...what about my bloody hard drive?'

Cut a long story short the little runt said he couldn't take any responsibility for it.

I was to say the least shocked with a capital S.

If only you knew what I had on it!

Practically my bloody life and the whole of Midas Gold.

Well, close to tears (I kid you not!), he eventually handed me the hard drive so that I could install it in my other PC, which I did and as yours-:)ing-truly tried it out (PC connected to the electricity and no less), I noticed a tiny stream of grey smoke emanating from the HD I was handling which is where I nearly had a stroke...

I rushed out and into my car and drove like mad down to my mate who tried everything he could to save what I had on it.

Well, he couldn't.

The damn thing was :)ed, to put it mildly of course.

And there you have it!

My week in bloody hell...

But like Bond I am back with a bloody vengeance!

MIDASGOLD will continue as soon as I recover from my mishap as described above.

As for you Chris, I have just read your review and I thank you wholeheartedly for it.

You really pointed things out for me and yes, I agree fully with what you wrote. We have a saying in the army: 'KIS' Keep It Simple, which is not what I did with NCD.

I will keep in mind your points I promise. They are very good points too and I thank you again for taking the trouble to read NCD.

I hope it won't keep you from reading the other bad-excuses for Fan Fic novels that are in my so called repertoire.

I wouldn't blame you if you did though.

Having said that, I hope I can do better with Midas Gold
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Yours truly, back from hell

Harry Fawkes


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Posted 12 October 2009 - 09:32 PM

Wow that was one hell of a B)ty week Harry!
I know how you feel. I had a similar problem about 18 months ago and yes, part of life has disappeared!
You have all my sympathy...

p.s. I look forward to Trouble Shooter et al!

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Posted 30 December 2012 - 12:27 PM

Well I must say dear readers. If I understood the site correctly, then NOBODY CHEATS DEATH is the second most viewed Fan Fic novel on CBn with a lovely 10405 views.

 

Well I'll be damned, is what Ian Fleming once said when they informed him JFK listed FRWL as one of his best novels.

 

That is cause for celebration tomorrow.

 

Thanks to all who have viewed it (myself included lololololol).

 

I will be toasting to my very first Bond novel at 0001 tomorrow. I will also raise my glass to my last Bond novel R O Y A L G A M B I T

 

And, due to the fact that NOBODY CHEATS DEATH has reached number two on the most viewed charts, I will also be re-posting it whole soon so that those of you who missed out on it first time round will be able to enjoy it in it's entirety.

 

Some of it got lost you see throughout the years and due to site changes and all that stuff.

 

Yes, it's going to be a happy happy New Year indeed.

 

Thanks to all

 

That gives an amateur writer like me courage you see.

 

Roger