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A Series of Drabbles: Redux


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#1 TortillaFactory

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Posted 02 April 2006 - 01:30 AM

You may remember my 31_days drabbles from last September; I'm doing it again for April.

For those who don't remember, 31_days is a LiveJournal community that offers up a theme for each day of the month, for which you can write a story about any characters/fandom you choose...it just needs to have something to do with the theme. I wrote 31 James Bond stories and I LOVED IT. Look for the same thing again....the deadline is midnight of each day.

Medium Rare
Theme: Dinner for three
Rating: PG
Blurb/Summary: Somewhere between the saut

#2 Robert Watts

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Posted 02 April 2006 - 05:59 AM

Great, I love the line 'modern France was commercıalısm, it was overpriced food, it was darkly tanned wiry women over fifty who thought a leopard-print design made it acceptable to display their brasserie straps to the world'

If you post each of the themes as they come I might do them on a different date and post them here.

#3 Joyce Carrington

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Posted 02 April 2006 - 10:14 AM

TF is back! :tup:

Excellent, I loved the previous series.

Who knows, if inspiration knocks at my door I might join you for a day or two.

#4 Qwerty

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Posted 02 April 2006 - 03:20 PM

Loved this one, TortillaFactory. These themes are terrific and inspired. Leads to some off-beat, but all the better for it, stories in my opinion.

#5 TortillaFactory

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Posted 02 April 2006 - 06:53 PM

Thanks, everyone. In case anybody wants to see the themes, they're all posted on the community info page already.

Heh, "offbeat" is just the right word to describe them, I think.

Off to work on today's...

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Posted 02 April 2006 - 10:31 PM

Looking forward to it!

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Posted 03 April 2006 - 12:41 AM

Whisper
Theme: I am more land than water
Rating: PG-13
Blurb: I saw him. He doesn't think I saw him, but I did.

Probably only makes sense if you've read CR.

#8 Joyce Carrington

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Posted 03 April 2006 - 07:14 AM

Wow.

That's good.

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Posted 03 April 2006 - 08:01 AM

lol. Thanks, Fenz.

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Posted 03 April 2006 - 11:41 PM

A BMB-centric drabble...odd. Not sure I like it. I am writing from Jessica's point of view, which is not really something I've done.

And So Forth
Theme: Etc.
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Veni, vidi, vici? But they'll never get to "veni," not if she has anything to say about it.

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Posted 05 April 2006 - 06:00 AM

Cowboys and Indians
Theme: When in doubt, gallop!
Rating: PG
Blurb: "If you were anyone else, you'd be dead by now."

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Posted 05 April 2006 - 12:05 PM

Whisper
Theme: I am more land than water
Rating: PG-13
Blurb: I saw him. He doesn't think I saw him, but I did.

Probably only makes sense if you've read CR.


Quite enjoyable, TF.

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Posted 05 April 2006 - 11:10 PM

Woman Like a Man
Theme: Girls who are boys who like boys to be girls
Rating: PG-13
Blurb: She was what Earnest Hemingway would have been, if he were a woman.

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Posted 06 April 2006 - 10:24 AM

Nice work!

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Posted 07 April 2006 - 06:46 AM

Thanks, Robert.

I Spy
Theme: Mad Lib communication
Rating: PG
Blurb: I spy, with my little eye.

#16 Joyce Carrington

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Posted 07 April 2006 - 09:13 AM

Reader's choice, eh?

No, no. Not Jess. Not this time. I'll go for one of the other ones. :tup:

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Posted 07 April 2006 - 10:37 AM

Well I'm going to try something short (no more then three hundred words, do the math Joyce :tup: ) using the theme 'Venus loves Mars' it is the seventh here now, so I should be able to crank something out by midnight. (Not that I'll enter it on that site, I'll probably just host it on fanfiction.net [scum hole as it is, my work might actually appear good there])

#18 TortillaFactory

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Posted 07 April 2006 - 04:13 PM

No, no. Not Jess. Not this time. I'll go for one of the other ones.


Oh goodness, no. It wasn't meant to be. Truth be told I think Tania stood out in my mind more than anyone else when I was writing that.

Good luck, Robert!

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Posted 08 April 2006 - 12:07 AM

It won't be much (and it will be a day overdue in theory) just a bit of a round up of the Honeychile-Bond relationship, and a mention of her husband to be.

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Posted 08 April 2006 - 06:29 AM

Summer
Theme: And Venus loved Mars
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Her only love, sprung from her only hate?

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Posted 08 April 2006 - 11:17 AM

Well I put my 'And Venus Loved Mars' attempt on the shelf, it was pretty bad and needed a redux, however I did write a short that could fit into the 9th's category.

Death For Breakfast
Theme:Hunting with cats
Rating:PG
Blurb:The meal was a perfect cure for the enduring hangover from two nights ago.

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Posted 08 April 2006 - 06:58 PM

Death For Breakfast
Theme:Hunting with cats
Rating:PG
Blurb:The meal was a perfect cure for the enduring hangover from two nights ago.


Short! :tup:

Honestly? I saw the twist coming immediately, mostly because of the reference to "the dark haired man" - hardly anyone would refer to Bond that way. So for me, the twist wasn't a twist, therefore the story fell flat. This doesn't mean it's bad. I would suggest changing it from "the dark haired man" to "he." This removes much of the suspicions that the audience might have as to the identity of the man, since they will assume "he" is Bond.

Still, I'm not sure that one twist is enough to hold up even a short-short-short story. Maybe a few more moody details - scene setters. Too many may give away the twist, I realise that, but perhaps you could describe the taste of the salty bacon or the groggy feeling in the man's head from that "enduring hangover." It reads a bit like a screenplay now, and some Flemingesque details would fix that.

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Posted 08 April 2006 - 11:36 PM

Cheers, I'll try to plump it up a bit then :tup:

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Posted 09 April 2006 - 06:54 AM

Homesick
Theme: The world through my feet
Rating: PG
Blurb: I have walked on the stones of a Colombian prison. I have felt the sacred dirt of Jerusalem under my feet.

#25 Joyce Carrington

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Posted 09 April 2006 - 09:21 AM

Awww. Sweet, somehow. :tup:

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Posted 10 April 2006 - 06:18 AM

Cats and Dogs
Theme: Hunting with cats
Rating: G
Blurb: "The problem with espionage is - well, it's like hunting with cats. Why do you think nobody hunts with cats?"

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Posted 10 April 2006 - 07:16 AM

Very amusing. :tup: James Bond chewing on a toothpick had me completely picture Brosnan!Bond for some reason. :D

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Posted 10 April 2006 - 07:27 AM

Very amusing. :tup: James Bond chewing on a toothpick had me completely picture Brosnan!Bond for some reason. :D


I'm not surprised. It has a very Film!Bond feel to it. The pun solidifies things.

(I picture Bond chewing on toothpicks a fair amount, though. Bit of an oral fixation.)

(Look, it's not dirty. It's NOT.)

Oral fixations are considered to contribute to over-eating, being overly talkative, smoking addictions and alcoholism (known as "oral dependent" qualities). Other symptoms include a sarcastic or "biting" personality (known as "oral sadistic" qualities).


(See? SEE?)

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Posted 10 April 2006 - 10:33 AM

No. No. You're not dirty.

You just write about kinky librarians. :tup:

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Posted 10 April 2006 - 10:58 AM

You can't talk...

does this ring a bell?