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[double0kevin]

check out my new bond novel in the fan fiction posting now!

tell me what you think here!!!

thanks.

Story Here

[Xenobia]

It's a very interesting story. I like how it opens...with Bond's target already being dead. I look forward to seeing how this plays out.

-- Xenobia

[double0kevin]

thanks vary much.im working on chapters 3 and 4 as we speak.they will be up as soon as im finished with them.

[Kingdom Come]

Kevin, I love your title. But do Cuban jungles have Owls? Maybe they do.

[double0kevin]

thanks kingdom come! ye i must look into that owl thing.what did you think of my noval so far?

[Kingdom Come]

All u have to do, Kevin, is just remove the word OWL! shouldnt make a great difference. I like your story so far, but I'm not a great novel reader, so I am not a good judge. I only read Faction. I thought some of your story elements were a wee bit too familar and reminded me of too many recent Bond films. All u need to do is freshen that up a bit. For example the wire cutters/fence/credit card.

*_*

[double0kevin]

well i like it at the moment! chapter 3 i now up and running!
take a look now!! and tell me what you think.

[Xenobia]

I like chapter three! I always do love a good Moneypenny and Q scene, and this is good.

If I could make one suggestion...try to be a little more careful with your punctuation.

-- Xenobia

[double0kevin]

ye ok xenobia thanks! chapter four will be up tommoro night!
and i removed the owl from chapter 1!

[double0kevin]

chapter 4 will def be up tonight! im working on chapter 5 as we speak!
i will tell you's as soon as chapter 4 is up!

[double0kevin]

well chapter 4 is now up and ready to be read! go and have a read now!!! and come back here to tell me what you think!!

[Xenobia]

Hmmmmm...usually we have to wait a while before we find out who the traitor is. Do you intend to have Ms. Adams be a double agent of some kind, or is Bond going to meet up with another girl?

I do like how the plot is progressing though.

-- Xenobia

[double0kevin]

well u will see what happens with another girl! but i do have a little secret planned! watch this space! chapter 5 will be up on tuesday or wednesday!!

[Xenobia]

I will definately watch out for it. Glad to hear you have some surprises up your sleeve.

-- Xenobia

[double0kevin]

chapter 5 will def be up tommoro night! [tuesday]

[double0kevin]

hi all! chapter 5 of the fallen kill is no up to read! go and read it now!!!
and enjoy.then give me some feed back on what you thought of this chapter. thanks.

[Xenobia]

I like how the plot is moving along. I like the surprise of who Bond's ally is. Nice work.

You are still having trouble with your punctuation. Everytime someone speaks...they should have a new line for what he or she says.

Good luck!

-- Xenobia

[double0kevin]

ye ok im working on my punctuation. i still have some tricks up my sleeves though.im gald you like the allie thing.

[double0kevin]

chapter 6 of my novel [the fallen kill] will be up monday night!!!

[Jim]

It's become incredibly difficult to read (by which I mean physically rather than narratively); sorry, gave up on it as a result.

[double0kevin]

what do you mean jim??? physically? i dont understand, explain more....

[double0kevin]

ok all, chapter 6 of my bond novel is now up to read.
[the fallen kill].

[Jim]

Originally posted by double0kevin
what do you mean jim??? physically? i dont understand, explain more....

Exactly what I say - it's very difficult to look at the block of sheer text and try to unravel it.

Even if punctuating's not your bag, if you space it out or break it up a bit it would be a considerably more pleasant experience.

[double0kevin]

ok jim, i will do that. whst do u think of the story?

[double0kevin]

ok all ive been vey busy with chapter 7 of my bond story, so tonight it will be up.im still looking for a front cover for it so if any of u are interested pm me.

[double0kevin]

ok all chapter 7 is now up to read, enjoy.

[Xenobia]

Isn't it amazing how folks always seem to want to get back to their old culture...even when they weren't raised with it?

Nicely played hand Kevin.

-- Xenobia

[double0kevin]

you like the story? or are you being sarcastic?

[double0kevin]

hey all, wow what a busy month its been with my school results coming soon, o well i have ice doing my bond cover for me and its looking damm good! im also busy at work on chaapter 8 of the fallen kill and at the moment im reading shatterhand! check it out its a must read!

chapter 8 coming soon........ [the fallen kill]

[double0kevin]

ok i havent put up chapter 8 as yet and ye i know its been awhile but i have been so busy in school an all, i have some of chapter 8 done and over the weekend i hope to do more. sorry for the delay, but it will be up asap! and after i finish the fallen kill i am going to start researching for a bond script.