Leon - Your screenplay for "Shatterhand" was a very entertaining read.
* I liked that you drew influences from Fleming's "Moonraker" and "You Only Live Twice" and probably a few others I can't presently recall. I can't really picture Dench's M playing bridge, though, but I guess it works to toughen the old bird up a bit.
* Introducing us to Boothroyd, Ponsonby and Moneypenny was a nice touch and you did it fluidly without making it seem shoe-horned in.
* The scene in which
was
very Fleming and I could perfectly picture Craig's Bond doing it.
* Nice nod to SPECTRE with Quantum's mysterious round-table meeting.
* All of the action scenes are well-documented and easy to follow. I can say from personal experience that it's often difficult to keep track of everything going on when I try writing an action sequence but you seem to have it down pat.
* Having Bond's
is an interesting change from what most fan fiction writers do when they choose to adapt that particular unmined bit of Fleming treasure.
* Very satisfying, classic Bond ending. Craig needs one of those sooner or later, right?
I only really have two criticisms/suggestions:
* Be a bit more descriptive.
Tell us the makes of the cars the characters drive throughout the script. Maybe even add a cast list and a title song singer just to stimulate the reader's mind's eye a bit more.
* The script's mottled with some grammatical and punctuation errors. Words like "MI6" and "Double-0" should always be capitalized. But don't get me wrong, none of these little quibbles detracted from the overall experience of reading the script.
All in all, great work.