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[volante]

CHAPTER 18
Every Journey...

In for submission.

Enjoy the teaser



Hessel’s arms encircled her waist “Soon, my darling, very soon”
Elodie buried her face into Jurgen Hessel’s shoulder, very softly she sobbed.
After all this was what her mind had been programed for.
Her memory had been moulded to know that this was the moment that would define her; forever.
“There is something I want you to see before we all meet” Hessel whispered.
“What; what do I need to know?”
“Don’t worry. All the information you need to know is contained in a small box"

[volante]

[volante]

Some very kind words of encouragement and caution from the Major.

Thanks Bob, I am inspired...

Hi, Paul,
I'm pleased to review the Decree Absolute. Now, I confess, I was very fond of A Secret To The Grave, and that remains my favorite, but here are some thoughts. I thought Decree Absolute lagged just a bit in the early chapters, but that may just be me. Anyway, your most recent few chapters have been very good indeed.

As always, your research has been meticulous, and it shows throughout. I liked your descriptions of the new Jaguar and Range Rover, and there were some amusing nods to the canonical Bond (the name Sterling). Also, I liked the fun your had introducing the martini. You had Bond laugh when Juliet said, "Gosh, that's certainly a drink," and I did as well. By the way, I think Juliet is a nicely written character.

I've got a correction for Chapter 10. Your reference to "schematic" heart disease should be "ischemic."

The action scenes have been well written: the intense airline scene in Chapter 8, the Apache attack on the Range Rover, and the airliner's crash landing are standouts. I also liked the idea of a pharmaceutical Russain Roulette. It's hard to come up with new torture/ interrogation scenarios, and this was was original and gripping.

I'm looking forward to more!

All the best,

Bob

[volante]

volante, on 11 May 2012 - 06:41 AM, said:

Some very kind words of encouragement and caution from the Major.

Thanks Bob, I am inspired...

Hi, Paul,
I'm pleased to review the Decree Absolute. Now, I confess, I was very fond of A Secret To The Grave, and that remains my favorite, but here are some thoughts. I thought Decree Absolute lagged just a bit in the early chapters, but that may just be me. Anyway, your most recent few chapters have been very good indeed.

As always, your research has been meticulous, and it shows throughout. I liked your descriptions of the new Jaguar and Range Rover, and there were some amusing nods to the canonical Bond (the name Sterling). Also, I liked the fun your had introducing the martini. You had Bond laugh when Juliet said, "Gosh, that's certainly a drink," and I did as well. By the way, I think Juliet is a nicely written character.

I've got a correction for Chapter 10. Your reference to "schematic" heart disease should be "ischemic."

The action scenes have been well written: the intense airline scene in Chapter 8, the Apache attack on the Range Rover, and the airliner's crash landing are standouts. I also liked the idea of a pharmaceutical Russain Roulette. It's hard to come up with new torture/ interrogation scenarios, and this was was original and gripping.

I'm looking forward to more!

All the best,

Bob

Chapter 8 is the car crashing down the side of the mountain. Still gripping though.

[007jamesbond]

hoping that a new chapter will come soon

[Major Tallon]

Sorry, Volante. You know, everyone has a trademark. Brosnan had his Brioni suits, Craig has his Vespers, I've got my typing errors (and my goodness, did I make a lot of them)! I'd meant to comment on the car crash in Chapter 8 and the plane crash in Chapter 15. And you're right -- still gripping.

[volante]

Major Tallon, on 12 May 2012 - 12:44 AM, said:

Sorry, Volante. You know, everyone has a trademark. Brosnan had his Brioni suits, Craig has his Vespers, I've got my typing errors (and my goodness, did I make a lot of them)! I'd meant to comment on the car crash in Chapter 8 and the plane crash in Chapter 15. And you're right -- still gripping.

Knowing that you enjoyed it gives me a buzz.

Chapter Twenty (of Thirty) is in for submission tonight.
That way Harry has a clear week for the first installment of Royal Gambit.

Here's just a taster



Kolossi Castle or tower as it’s referred to by the locals is a plain stone grey square shaped fortress dating back to the 12^th century.
The grounds evoke a peaceful feeling, but are hardly the most luxurious of hideaways for visiting Royalty.
Behind the castle, stretching into the gently sloping hillside are various training grounds.
A mock city street, used for ‘fast response’ house to house combat simulations had been adapted from the buildings which used to house the sugar mills in the 14^th century.
And in the distance a well trodden path led to the live mine fields used for disarming.

[chrisno1]

Paul,
I haven't been keeping up with DA, but I will get to it [I prefer to read in one hit, gives me a better feel for the piece] however, is that Kolossi Castle in Cyprus?
Only wondered. I did a scenario for Colonel Sun a number of years back which used the castle as its climatic location, having visited, I thought it a very good locale.
Just wondered.
Chris

[volante]

chrisno1, on 17 May 2012 - 10:14 PM, said:

Paul,
I haven't been keeping up with DA, but I will get to it [I prefer to read in one hit, gives me a better feel for the piece] however, is that Kolossi Castle in Cyprus?
Only wondered. I did a scenario for Colonel Sun a number of years back which used the castle as its climatic location, having visited, I thought it a very good locale.
Just wondered.
Chris

Absolutely right Chris. I always try to give a nod of the head to past Bond adventures within the tales.
The location fell right, as a being very close to the Air Bridge, used by British troops returning from Afganistan.
There's still 10 nail biting twisting turning chapters to go; before the all revealing epilogue.

You'll have ample time to devour DA before SF

Cheers
Paul

[Harry Fawkes]

Paul I had to tear myself off DA last night to get back to writing my own FF.

I was however truly inspired - you've set the standards damn sky high (as bloody usual).

Great job mate the way its going.

Had some problems with me printer but a kick here and a thump there and it soon got working. Will be reading more tonight.

[chrisno1]

volante, on 18 May 2012 - 02:40 PM, said:

There's still 10 nail biting twisting turning chapters to go; before the all revealing epilogue.

You'll have ample time to devour DA before SF

I'd better make a start soon ! Be hard to fit it in later on.